Spinnning
Spinning
You
lift me off the ground
Spinning.
Around.
Around..
You
lift my soul
Out
of the rut
Into
the sun
My
head touches the rays
Reigning
down from the sun.
Heating
the very essence
Of
myself.
You
bring out the best
Of
me.
In
every single way.
Taking
out my flaws..
Turning
into life.
I
lock away the treasured moments
We
share.
To
save for a rainy day.
A
lonely hour
When
I'm missing you.
When
I first met you.
When
I first saw you.
I
saw everything
Within
that moment.
Our
dates.
Our
wedding.
Your
love.
My
smile.
I
was trapped in a dark moment
Screaming
for a soul
To
save me.
And
that was
You.
I
can see my life.
Of
happiness
Within
your arms
Now
I know.
'Til
death will our hearts part.
Our
secret vows are eternal.
We
can share love.
Through
our golden years.
As
we remember
Our
youthful splendor
Out
there
In
the sun.
Dance
with me
Dance
with me
Up
to this day
You
capture my heart.
Lifting
my feet.
Off
the ground.
Making
me feel.
Uncontained.
Our
hearts…
Connect
over many miles
Over
mountains.
Over
seas.
I
will fight
To
see your face.
Only
a faded memory
From
my broken past.
I
will hold your face in my heart.
Until
death…
Will
our hearts part.
My
love…..
This is way cool! I think that this is very creative, but, hate to say it, but I don't think that it would score very well. You should add a paragraph comparing it to another book, or reasoning as to why you think that this will happen. Otherwise, the poem is great, it made me think, but you might want to consider adding that extra paragraph. I think that it was part of the assignment.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sara for the feedback. I know I have to add the extra part. I will make this poem into a small piece including the other parts. Thanks. (:
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