You see clouds in the sky
I see free souls with personalities and stories
You may see a gray sky
I can see a rainbow
You see the sun
I see a new start
You see a broken heart
I see how to fix it
You see the tears streaking down their face
I see a new start
You see a broken heart
I see how to fix it
You see the tears streaking down their face
I see an emotion
You see a flaw
I see their talents
You see a flaw
I see their talents
You only see a streak of paint
I see the start of a masterpiece
You see what it appears to be
I see what it really is
I dig deeper than you do
You only cut at the edges and just peer at it
The world is to be explored of its ideas
Mysteries and wonders can be uncovered
If you see differently
This is an awesome piece, but make sure that there is some sort of punctuation in here, like a comma at the and of each stanza. It makes it kind of hard to read.
ReplyDeleteI really like the "You, I" repetition. Also, you have really good phrases, like "You only see a streak of paint, I see the start of a masterpiece." Your title is really strong, too.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everything Monica said. This is a really strong poem.
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