Everyone has a purpose, but many don’t fulfill it. Many people are confused about their own self worth and try to fill it with friends, food, dieting, and clothes. We should try to discover what is inside us that make us special. We don’t have to be a copy and should be happy.
Good concept. You have shown an opinion and a stance, but now what? Consider how you would fill the rest of this essay if you were to continue it. Would you have paragraphs of "proof" to get readers to agree with you, or would you just be reiterating your hook?
ReplyDeleteThink of a thesis as a question you spend the rest of your essay answering. For example, "Everyone has a purpose, but why are so many people not fulfilling it?" or, "How can we discover what inside of us sets us apart from other people?" This makes a reader want to know the answer, and draws him into reading more in order to find out.